chica,
While the tickling in your beautifully detailed tale is giggle-inducing and toe-curling, I was struck by how heroic you made AJ's resistance against her feather-wielding foe. By the end of this chapter (and there must be another, no?), the suspense over whether Bolt Girl could deny the Mistress the power for her infernal device is palpable. Delicious tickle torture prose is, of course, delightful, but couple it with a well-wrought suspenseful situation, and it's even better.
So, thank you for this Bolt Girl debut. Please don't leave us (or her!) cliffhanging for long!