Desek's Tease Part 1 (nudity */f)

[stiltz]

i know it's taken me freaking forever to put this together. hope you enjoy it. part 2 should be coming up by next week...

 

[stiltz]

...continued...

 

[stiltz]

...and continued.

this is my first attempt at an e-comic. i appreciate all constructive criticism, but please be gentle. me self-esteem thanks you in advance...

 

[Low_Roads]

Yay! More comix! The highest form of art submission, for my money! If we really do receive one of these a week, I'm going to be a very happy camper! Fine stuff, Stiltz! You have a wily ear for verbal exchange: Desek's dialogue with the Eronaut is filled with a teasing, seductive tension that's great fun to read! The scripting features plenty of specific, intriguing detail... I particularly like the flashback fate of the poor ship's cook (he who sauced not wisely but too well!) And your artwork is sumptuous (the opening, star-spangled establishing page is colorfully cinematic), dramatic (Desek's silhouetted entrance is quite memorable!), or humorously elastic, as need calls for. If I have a gripe, it's only a small, technical one (and easily fixed, I should think); the images seem rather soft-focused (that is to say, not as sharp as they might be). This is hardly fatal to the presentation though, and if every installment of "Desek's Tease" lives up to the standard you've established here, I believe you'll have an overwhelmingly popular success on your hands! More, much more, please!

 

[Master Chief]

Even if there is nudity, I like it. Desek is the kind of girl you'd want to tickle.

 

[blackmagicjack1]

I enjoyed the storyline, and the dichotomy of the silly tickle monster compared to the scrumptious Desek is tantalizing. I look forward to seeing more and how you will improve as you produce more.

 

[Cbarton]

Can't wait to see how this 'serial' story runs...excellent work!

 

[Relent<]

extremely well put together for a first time comic artist, but a bit of advice that may or may not be needed:
when drawing detail lines like those showing the ribs or wrinkles from motion, they should be especially fine lines, otherwise the picture looks a little stark and amateur-esque, y'know? Just some constructive criticism ^_^
but otherwise, its very nicely done and I look forward to part two. Did you use a paint program to make this? You are a braver man than I.

 

[stockman]

I crave the sequel! More please!!

 

[stiltz]

you guys are awesome! seriously, after visiting so many other forums where people tear each other apart simply because the relish the shield of anonymity, it's heartwarming to find such a friendly atmosphere!

i'll have the second half of this particular story by next weekend, as it's already in the finishing stages. if any stories follow, however, they'll take a little while longer. hope to get faster at this as i go along.

THANKS AGAIN!!!

 

[Tickling_Anime]

I really liked it, and can't wait for the seconded one.

 

[The Bandito]

Wow O_____________o

I LOVE this comic! I love the nudity, and the format, and the upperbody tickling, and Desek's cute attitude.

This was a very very fun read, and I CAN'T WAIT for part two.

You've got some serious potential, dude! And also some great talent.

In terms of constructive input - the only thing I see that you could change that would immediately improve the style is to give desek fewer lines in her body. All this is purely subjective, but I feel like fewer lines in the body (including the face) make the body look younger, softer, and give a more professional feel. Try a pic with Desek where she only has a few carefully placed lines inside her body and I think you'll see an improvement in her "appeal".

Just my two cents buddy - this is a really enjoyable comic. Please make more, and definitely be proud of it!

Best,

Bandito

 

[Darth Vegeta]

Wow excellent work! I really do love a good comic and these are great!

 

[stiltz]

Thanks for all the comments!!!

Uploading part 2 now. But I'll be putting it on a new thread since it shall require an "explicit" warning...

 

[Featherdemon]

Duuhuuude! Your work is amazing! I rehheeaallly love the tentacle/alien tickles thing and what yu have created here my friend is a fantasy incarnate! Wonderful script! Wonderful drawings, and the spread of the story is masterful! Thank you very much! 😀😀😀