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How do you write a tickling scene?
LOL Patience, friend. Weekends tend to be a bit busy for folks. So, you aren't as likely to get responses as quickly.
As for the question about the scene...
When I write, it just let things go where they go. I often have some idea (as you have here) of where I want things to go. Then, I put myself in the place of one or the other of the characters, sometimes both, and try to picture it from that perspective. It sounds like you have a good jump on it.
You say he's her magic teacher. Not knowing what all you have set up so far, perhaps presenting her as a prodigy of sorts would be one approach. She surprises him with a spell that disables him so that he can't escape, teases him about her "magic" fingers getting responses out of him, etc.
It could go in a number of directions. But, you're the one writing it. So, do what makes YOU feel good about it. Then, just share it. You don't have to have everything perfect. Just have fun!
As for the question about the scene...
When I write, it just let things go where they go. I often have some idea (as you have here) of where I want things to go. Then, I put myself in the place of one or the other of the characters, sometimes both, and try to picture it from that perspective. It sounds like you have a good jump on it.
You say he's her magic teacher. Not knowing what all you have set up so far, perhaps presenting her as a prodigy of sorts would be one approach. She surprises him with a spell that disables him so that he can't escape, teases him about her "magic" fingers getting responses out of him, etc.
It could go in a number of directions. But, you're the one writing it. So, do what makes YOU feel good about it. Then, just share it. You don't have to have everything perfect. Just have fun!
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Well you have a good idea of how the teacher will act, and that's a big first step. When you can answer the question "What would (s)he do in this situation," then you're good to write him believably.
Next concern... He's not the sort to really laugh as such, but I don't want him giggling like a little fangirl either. In this case, I'd say try to picture someone who is just being tickled lightly, or is just moderately ticklish. They'd squirm and twist. They'd snort and snicker. They'd smile and grin, but keep their teeth clenched together most likely. If he's someone who wants to be in control of himself or doesn't like the feelings at first, then he'd also be trying to grab her and stop her all-the-while.
As for how to describe everything... I'm sorry, I don't really have any good suggestions here. It all depends on your writing style, but all I can say is to try and keep the same style/detail you've written in so far, or change what you've previously written to match what you're about to write. I find that when I write something on different days and with a different mood, it almost looks like two different authors wrote the story.
Next concern... He's not the sort to really laugh as such, but I don't want him giggling like a little fangirl either. In this case, I'd say try to picture someone who is just being tickled lightly, or is just moderately ticklish. They'd squirm and twist. They'd snort and snicker. They'd smile and grin, but keep their teeth clenched together most likely. If he's someone who wants to be in control of himself or doesn't like the feelings at first, then he'd also be trying to grab her and stop her all-the-while.
As for how to describe everything... I'm sorry, I don't really have any good suggestions here. It all depends on your writing style, but all I can say is to try and keep the same style/detail you've written in so far, or change what you've previously written to match what you're about to write. I find that when I write something on different days and with a different mood, it almost looks like two different authors wrote the story.
Hi, Eminor,
Here's what I'd keep in mind:
Almost everyone's writing looks better to other people than to themselves (unless they're oblivious to proper conventions). If you think your writing looks cheap, consider the likelihood that it's just normal paranoia.
Almost every fetish is based on some kind of psychological priming, which is why most fetishes only affect certain groups of people. I think that good enough writing really can cause writers to appreciate new fetishes (which studies and research can't do nearly as well)... but it's not about writing it using just intensifiers or erotic-sounding words, but about why the person's interested in what's going on in the first place. There are a bunch of ways to do this including expositional flashbacks, metaphors, and descriptions of the person's mental processes before the action.
As basic as it sounds, it's totally okay to imagine yourself as this person, noting the sensory stimuli (and the thoughts) you'd pay attention to, and ignoring the ones you wouldn't notice.
Finally, if you're put-off by the ratio of views to comments, just wait until you post your story. Usually the people who are kind enough to comment are a meagre fraction at best. Also, remember that comments are unique and views aren't necessarily. ^_^
Here's what I'd keep in mind:
Almost everyone's writing looks better to other people than to themselves (unless they're oblivious to proper conventions). If you think your writing looks cheap, consider the likelihood that it's just normal paranoia.
Almost every fetish is based on some kind of psychological priming, which is why most fetishes only affect certain groups of people. I think that good enough writing really can cause writers to appreciate new fetishes (which studies and research can't do nearly as well)... but it's not about writing it using just intensifiers or erotic-sounding words, but about why the person's interested in what's going on in the first place. There are a bunch of ways to do this including expositional flashbacks, metaphors, and descriptions of the person's mental processes before the action.
As basic as it sounds, it's totally okay to imagine yourself as this person, noting the sensory stimuli (and the thoughts) you'd pay attention to, and ignoring the ones you wouldn't notice.
Finally, if you're put-off by the ratio of views to comments, just wait until you post your story. Usually the people who are kind enough to comment are a meagre fraction at best. Also, remember that comments are unique and views aren't necessarily. ^_^
I can't help with the writing but if your spelling is a problem i have two words-Spell Check.Its free and easy to use.I would be lost without it.Good luck on your story.😀
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Well it's like this...
Just let it flow from you. What seems bad to you is probably pretty good, you are just being to hard on yourself. As you go on your work will get better from story to story, and soon you will be a superstar with your own archive... actualy they'll give anybody with a couple of stories an archibve, hell I have one for crying out loud.
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Just let it flow from you. What seems bad to you is probably pretty good, you are just being to hard on yourself. As you go on your work will get better from story to story, and soon you will be a superstar with your own archive... actualy they'll give anybody with a couple of stories an archibve, hell I have one for crying out loud.
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Hey Eminor
If it sounds good to you, it will probably touch a nerve with someone else here when you write it down. Go for it, we can never have too many enthusiastic authors posting their work round here.
As Coda said, you will tend to see a lot of stories getting loads of views but not very many comments which can be a bit disheartening, especially if it is your first story. Slaver's advice is spot on too and these two guys are very good authors.
I look forward to reading your first story.
If it sounds good to you, it will probably touch a nerve with someone else here when you write it down. Go for it, we can never have too many enthusiastic authors posting their work round here.
As Coda said, you will tend to see a lot of stories getting loads of views but not very many comments which can be a bit disheartening, especially if it is your first story. Slaver's advice is spot on too and these two guys are very good authors.
I look forward to reading your first story.
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Thanks suikoden, but you know what they say? A pat on the back is only 16" away from a kick in the pants, so I guess I better watch my ass 😀
Eminor,
It is hard to appreciate our own talents, since they come naturally to us. But here is some perspective you may be missing: everyone can write. Everyone can dream. Everyone can fantasize. But what already separates you from the pack is that you took pen to paper (or keyboard) and put something down on paper. That's the hardest thing in the world. Except maybe putting out oil well fires. So, this is the part people often overlook, but don't forget to give yourself credit for the effort.
Now, here is one other thing you may not realize when you read stories in books, magazines and periodicals: you are not reading first drafts. Just like you, those writers and authors tossed out something on paper, then decided to revise it. Every published story in the world has had someone tinker with it, be it an agent, an editor or a publisher. To quote from a book on writing by a a guy named Jerry Cleaver: the beginning writer reads his first draft and says, "This is awful. I'm screwed." The experienced writer reads his first draft and says, "This is awful. I'm on my way!"
Keep working on your scene. Eventually, you'll get it.
-- Sharon
It is hard to appreciate our own talents, since they come naturally to us. But here is some perspective you may be missing: everyone can write. Everyone can dream. Everyone can fantasize. But what already separates you from the pack is that you took pen to paper (or keyboard) and put something down on paper. That's the hardest thing in the world. Except maybe putting out oil well fires. So, this is the part people often overlook, but don't forget to give yourself credit for the effort.
Now, here is one other thing you may not realize when you read stories in books, magazines and periodicals: you are not reading first drafts. Just like you, those writers and authors tossed out something on paper, then decided to revise it. Every published story in the world has had someone tinker with it, be it an agent, an editor or a publisher. To quote from a book on writing by a a guy named Jerry Cleaver: the beginning writer reads his first draft and says, "This is awful. I'm screwed." The experienced writer reads his first draft and says, "This is awful. I'm on my way!"
Keep working on your scene. Eventually, you'll get it.
-- Sharon
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No one says what starts off romantic can't become something sexual. I think a baby or two was made because daddy was romantic towards mommy lol. At any rait, good luck with you work, I'm sure it will be very good.
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