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I have minimal writing talent but I think I can draw very well. For those of you with the vise versa on this, I was wondering if you could help me write the script for my comic. This is meant to appease ler and lees of all sorts so there'll be f/m, m/f, */f, and my personal fav, f/f. This is what I have so far:
Premise: A primitive type enviroment, a cross between midevel and prehistoric. There are dragons and giants and all other manner of mystic creatures, but the people speak perfect english and some societies dress like cave people and others like knights and such. Currently there is a period in time known as the siege of the Elemental Sisters:
Gaia: earth
Nova: fire
Hydra: water
Wendy (lol) : wind
Square1: Takauni (lead charac.) in village guild, asking the whereabouts of her missing boyfriend.
Tak: What do you mean he never came back?!
Guil: Exactly what i said! He took the bounty on Gaia and went to hunt her and never came back.
Square2: Takauni cu (close up) Expr.(expression) contemplative/ grim
Tak: Dammit. You don't think she could've....
Square3: Guild clerk behind Takauni (face shadowed)
Guil: No, No, I'm sure it didn't happen like that! He's probably alive and well, yuckin' it up with some buddies celebrating his victory!
Square4: Cu of Guild C. putting his hand on Tak's shoulder.
Square5: cu Of Tak swatting hand away
Square6: Tak cu, slightly angry. Looking over shoulder at guild clerk
Tak: He's not that irresponsible. He'd come back....no matter what...
Square7: Tak picking up spear. turned toward door
Tak: I'm going after him.
Guil: What?! Are you insane?! if that thing did kill Kratos (her boyfriend), and he was stronger than you, what makes you think you stand a chance?!
Square8: Tak glares at GC over her shoulder.
Tak: what happened to your optimism? Besides...
Square9: Tak cu; expr.= contemplative
Tak: He only beat me because he knew my weakness. This gaia thing dosen't, so I do stand a chance.
Square10: eviro V (eviroment view) of fortress
"meanwhile, at the fortress of Gaia...."
Square11: Kratos in dungeon, chained to wall
os(of screen)voice: So, you intended to kill me did you?
Square12: hooded woman steps from shadows
???: Did you think I'd let you just waltz in and take my life. heheehehhe...
Square13: cu Kratos; expr.= enraged
Krat: Wench! If you are truly confident in your strength, then unbind me and fight me had to hand, with honor if you know that word meaning!!
Square14: cu gaia(mysterious woman), mouth unshadowed; smirking
Gaia: Hmmhmmhmm....so sharp of tongue to be in your situation. But I am in need of a warrior...
os Krat: Truly you jest! Would you really expect me to side with a crazed nympth like you?!
Square15: Gaia cu; holding up a feather in front of her face
Gaia: hmm, I suppose I must first gain your submission...
Square16: Cu Kratos; expr.=horror
Square17: Tak running through te forest, spear in hand.
Square18: cu Tak; eyes focused forward.
Tak: Kratos....
Square19: ~flashback: Kratos vs. Tak in standoff position. (neither is armed)
~Square20: Kratos cu; expr.=rage
~Square21: cu Tak; expr.= violent anger
~Square22: Tak and Kratos charge one another
~Square23(.5 square): Tak punches; Square 24(.5 square): Kratos two-finger jab
~Square24: Tak with arm extended; Kratos crouched with fingers in Tak's armpit; Tak expr.=shock, Kratos BV (back view)
~Square25: cu Tak, expr.=shock/verge of laughter;
Tak: (gasp)
~Square26: Tak keels over laughing. Kratos still stands
Kratos: ?
Tak: AIEEEEHEEHEE!!
~Square27: cu Kratos; expr.=mischevious grin
Kratos; and here I was thinking you a formidable warrior!--
~Square28: Kratos descending on Tak
Kratos: --but it appears--
~Square29: Kratos' hand pinning Tak's wrists
Kratos:--that you're just--
~Square30: Kratos' hips on Tak's; tak's legs kicking
Kratos:--a ticklish--
~Square29: Tak pinned by Kratos TDV (top-down view)
Kratos: --Little girl!
~Square30: Kratos scratching Tak's armpits. (Tak hysterical throughout)
~square31: cu Tak; expr.=losing her mind with laughter
~Square32: End flashback; Kratos and Tak kiss.
Square33: Tak in front of Gaia's fortress.
And that's all. Any help?
Premise: A primitive type enviroment, a cross between midevel and prehistoric. There are dragons and giants and all other manner of mystic creatures, but the people speak perfect english and some societies dress like cave people and others like knights and such. Currently there is a period in time known as the siege of the Elemental Sisters:
Gaia: earth
Nova: fire
Hydra: water
Wendy (lol) : wind
Square1: Takauni (lead charac.) in village guild, asking the whereabouts of her missing boyfriend.
Tak: What do you mean he never came back?!
Guil: Exactly what i said! He took the bounty on Gaia and went to hunt her and never came back.
Square2: Takauni cu (close up) Expr.(expression) contemplative/ grim
Tak: Dammit. You don't think she could've....
Square3: Guild clerk behind Takauni (face shadowed)
Guil: No, No, I'm sure it didn't happen like that! He's probably alive and well, yuckin' it up with some buddies celebrating his victory!
Square4: Cu of Guild C. putting his hand on Tak's shoulder.
Square5: cu Of Tak swatting hand away
Square6: Tak cu, slightly angry. Looking over shoulder at guild clerk
Tak: He's not that irresponsible. He'd come back....no matter what...
Square7: Tak picking up spear. turned toward door
Tak: I'm going after him.
Guil: What?! Are you insane?! if that thing did kill Kratos (her boyfriend), and he was stronger than you, what makes you think you stand a chance?!
Square8: Tak glares at GC over her shoulder.
Tak: what happened to your optimism? Besides...
Square9: Tak cu; expr.= contemplative
Tak: He only beat me because he knew my weakness. This gaia thing dosen't, so I do stand a chance.
Square10: eviro V (eviroment view) of fortress
"meanwhile, at the fortress of Gaia...."
Square11: Kratos in dungeon, chained to wall
os(of screen)voice: So, you intended to kill me did you?
Square12: hooded woman steps from shadows
???: Did you think I'd let you just waltz in and take my life. heheehehhe...
Square13: cu Kratos; expr.= enraged
Krat: Wench! If you are truly confident in your strength, then unbind me and fight me had to hand, with honor if you know that word meaning!!
Square14: cu gaia(mysterious woman), mouth unshadowed; smirking
Gaia: Hmmhmmhmm....so sharp of tongue to be in your situation. But I am in need of a warrior...
os Krat: Truly you jest! Would you really expect me to side with a crazed nympth like you?!
Square15: Gaia cu; holding up a feather in front of her face
Gaia: hmm, I suppose I must first gain your submission...
Square16: Cu Kratos; expr.=horror
Square17: Tak running through te forest, spear in hand.
Square18: cu Tak; eyes focused forward.
Tak: Kratos....
Square19: ~flashback: Kratos vs. Tak in standoff position. (neither is armed)
~Square20: Kratos cu; expr.=rage
~Square21: cu Tak; expr.= violent anger
~Square22: Tak and Kratos charge one another
~Square23(.5 square): Tak punches; Square 24(.5 square): Kratos two-finger jab
~Square24: Tak with arm extended; Kratos crouched with fingers in Tak's armpit; Tak expr.=shock, Kratos BV (back view)
~Square25: cu Tak, expr.=shock/verge of laughter;
Tak: (gasp)
~Square26: Tak keels over laughing. Kratos still stands
Kratos: ?
Tak: AIEEEEHEEHEE!!
~Square27: cu Kratos; expr.=mischevious grin
Kratos; and here I was thinking you a formidable warrior!--
~Square28: Kratos descending on Tak
Kratos: --but it appears--
~Square29: Kratos' hand pinning Tak's wrists
Kratos:--that you're just--
~Square30: Kratos' hips on Tak's; tak's legs kicking
Kratos:--a ticklish--
~Square29: Tak pinned by Kratos TDV (top-down view)
Kratos: --Little girl!
~Square30: Kratos scratching Tak's armpits. (Tak hysterical throughout)
~square31: cu Tak; expr.=losing her mind with laughter
~Square32: End flashback; Kratos and Tak kiss.
Square33: Tak in front of Gaia's fortress.
And that's all. Any help?
