need critiques (ff/m)

[Relent<]

first and foremostm the image may be a bit large, so those of you who have trouble with loading times should hold off a while. Secondly, I need to have the prelinminary critiques done before i put the ink on this and all that rot. tell me what you all think.

Edit:right now its not letting me upload it; one moment plz

 

[Relent<]

maybe this time....

Ok, here we are ^_^

 

[SF85]

Reaaly great. Proportion seems to fit and is very well drawn.

 

[Master Chief]

You have skills in this art my friend. I think that it is just fine. Nothing is wrong with it at all.

 

[Spud_Mobile]

Very fantastic; I particularly like the slim body you gave him; it looks even more ticklish. 😉 The scale was an added wicked idea, and those nipple clamps look like they're actually hurting! lol

One nice thing is the way you drew his stomach; it looks like he's actually tensing the muscles as he's being tickled. I just wish I could see the feet. 😉 Are you looking for some constructive criticism as well?

 

[Darth Vegeta]

Wow evil Oo;
You should put it in the thread where pics of this kind are gathered about ticklish predicaments.

 

[Cosmo_ac1]

not getting a thumbnail showing. think somebody could repost this pic?

 

[Spillone]

I can't see any pic or link...can you repost it?
Tks!

 

[Relent<]

late responses (sry)

OK, first: I do plan to post the final version in that scenes of desperation thing. Also, I will continue this as a seres and the nurses will be getting this poor man's feet ^_0.
I'll repost the image fopr those it didn't work for. And yes, I am looking fro constructive critiques as well.

 

[ticklerxyz]

Great idea; I love tickling/teasing combined with a cost should the victim come. However, the predicament is somewhat unrealistic: the cum will probably overshoot the pan (perhaps the pan could be tilted or attached to a cup on its side) and it is unlikely that the weight of the cum could trip the switch (one could simply make the balance the switch; i.e., a wire attached to the other end of the balance which contacts another wire just above it when it swings upward). Sorry, but I'm a stickler for details.

 

[Relent<]

I considered the over-shot factor when first drawing it, but when i did have it drawn that way, it looked a bit tacky, so I sacrificed a little realism for asthetics; The wire thing is a good thought though, I'll be sue to add it.
I finally got around to inking it, btw; thoughs?