make it play out like a tv show/movie. Make it so there is a definate plot, not just "oh, here's a girl, oh she's getting tickled......enjoy!" On top of tickling stories, i also sometimes read stories of Mind Control, and this one story was like 9 long chapters, but it played out like TV show or a movie. It's one of the only interesting sexual stories i've read, and BTW: i consider tickling stories to be sexual, so that why i usually don't like stories about tickling if they are people who are related.