This is the first time I've read this and I was doing it before bed because I figured, hey, why not? There's a clear line of delineation between erotic literature and literature, the actual focus and desire from an authorial standpoint more than likely shifting depending on what exactly is being constructed. I came in expecting erotic literature. Maybe with more of a bent and articulated voice, but at the end of the day, I came in with the expectation of erotic literature.
This isn't really that. And as such, it has no place on this forum.
Yeah, you have tickling in this story and that's all well, fine, and good, but I'd be lying to you if I feel this story belongs on this forum. It doesn't. With a shift or a strip, I could imagine this in my Reader's Digest. Nah, not that. One of those indie published short story collections with the really abstract art on the cover. Yeah. One of those. I don't see why not. This isn't a value assessment on your story as bad. It's good. Cryptic. Soft and playful in an acid whitewash where the nerves have been cauterized of feeling but the More still remains.
Not going to blow smoke your ass about creative conventions, and in truth, you'd be better off posting these as PDFs rather than images. Your minimalist style threw me for a loop, but it was a pleasant one as I realized that you were rolling into a part of my brain that had been shut off in the pre-game for bed. I didn't pick this up expecting this. I was looking for something simple. There's no better compliment to pay another writer (this isn't the forum, this is as a writer to a writer) than to call them a writer.
I know you haven't been around. If you ever do come around, hit me up so we can talk about this.
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