Wow, that is one of the best written accounts I have ever read!
Neither; it was great from both perspectives. The build up created a genuine sense of anticipation, as we as readers experienced what you were feeling at the time. When the tickling began it was descriptive enough for us to envision your predicament, and I felt the pace of the writing increase. If you’re tickled for ten minutes, you don’t need a ten minute write up; we can picture the tickling taking place over ten minutes, if that makes sense. By the same token, the pace of the aftermath was a lot more slowed down. I thought, as if the tickle high was slowly easing off. Which it sadly does...!
I think that when we write first person accounts we always think it can be improved on. For example, I wrote a story in 2010 about my first tickling experience, and I still tinker with it now to try and improve it. This is a great account though, Daisy; if there are other sessions, I hope there’s more stories to follow!
Cheers, everybody,
SmashTV
Woowoo! Wat to GO, Daisy! Fingers crossed this experience was real for you! :happy: You write so well it was like I was a (pervy) fly on the wall, observing and relishing every anxious, ticklish moment of this cute, elated little story you’ve created. Also fingers crossed this will be - is - a series...?
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Incredible story! You're the find...🙂.
Bill
AWESOME STORY!!! Years in the making!!! 😀 Hopefully next story, if there is one, would add some tickle pixs of your beautiful feet! 🙂
ps.- I love the TITLE!!!! "From Personal Ad to Play Date!" Haha... Finally living your dream Maggs!!![]()
Thank you so much for the feedback - it's very hard to gauge a story when I'm so entangled in it. I'm glad the pace seemed to match the activity going on and that there was enough descriptives without going overboard. I know most readers would love nothing more than tickling from the first sentence to the last, but it's just not how I've ever written - there has to be some build-up for me. I tend to live very much inside my head (probably true of most writers, lol), so internal dialogue and feelings expressed in my stories are just a natural extension of that. I would like to be more descriptive of the tickling aspects of it, but I don't know how to do that without entering into the world where every laugh is literally spelled out for the reader. MAJOR pet peeve of mine to read "HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!" during a story, lol. Perhaps describing more of the 'lers tickle technique? I don't know. I'll have to think more on that.
I'd love to read your first tickling experience - can you shoot me a link? I totally get the urge to go back and refine a story once you put it out there. I think I've edited this story half a dozen times already 😀 Just tinkering with a word here and there, nothing major. I just can't leave well enough alone!
I'm totally with you about the build up, Daisy; I like to set a mood and try to convey what I'm feeling in the moment. I tend - I think - not to do bursts of 'HAHAHAHAHA!' but describe the laughter i.e. 'her laughter erupted from nowhere, shrieks piercing the air'. People know what laughter sounds like, but using descriptive language leaves it to the reader to determine how loud and wild the laughter is. Your writing is fine as is, but if you do write more stories, then I reckon you'll find the tone that works right for you. That said, as I mentioned earlier, I think that when we write we always want to change little bits here and there!
As for my first experience, you can find it on page 4 of the 'My Nylon Tickling Fetish' thread in this section. However, if you don't mind, I've also taken the liberty of PMing you your own copy for reference. Please read at your leisure, I hope that you like it and note that any feedback is welcome!
Cheers, everybody,
SmashTV
I can't explain how jealous and envious I am of your lucky playmates.
I so wish I was not on the opposite coast from you.
This is an amazing story Daisy. I enjoyed reading it but nowhere near as much as I did tickling you. The story is real...I know. Daisy is a Dream 'lee! This story is not about my session with Daisy. Our session was a little different, as it should be. It was our first of hopefully Many, so we had a little to learn about each other. It takes time to know all the workings inside the mind of a 'lee and I believe we're off to a quick start.
As I said Daisy is a Dream 'lee, in my eyes. We all have different ideas of how we would all like a session to play out. For instance, does she mind being tied up? Are her feet ticklish? Does she only allow "certain types of tickling?...soft strokes" Some people enjoy a struggling 'lee. Some want loud laughter.
So many different aspects other than the act of tickling itself. I found that Daisy is PERFECT! She checked all my boxes and a couple I didn't even know existed. She's cute with perfect feet, silky smooth skin and an awesome attitude! Perfect!![]()
Damn.. Very lucky BOXR... Haha hope you make Maggie safe word next time
Would love to hear your point of view with a story on your session with Maggie!![]()
Absolutely awesome Boxr... thank you for sharing. Years after Daisy made her foot thread I, as I am sure many have wondered how soft her feet really are? How ticklish and stubborn she is? You truly are a lucky guy! All of her now lers are truly lucky. I knew her safe word had to include the t word in some manner, hehe... You truly know how to drive her wild with laughter thank you for sharing your poi t of view on tickling her. Truly, years after helping bump her thread, because I know she is special and those feet deserve attention, we are now blessed with tales of that stubborn lee and her insanely, beautiful feet tickled. I thank you. With that said, awesome to hear she has a very ticklish neck and collarbone. Hehe 😀. .... I thank you again you two.
Very well done story. Like the enthusiasm for writing and details.
I loved your story daisycrazy!
It's interesting that every once in a while despite normally being incredibly careful and cautious about meeting people for play too early in a relationship that it sometimes happens. In my case on a couple of occasions and obviously in yours something just clicked and it felt right. I always go with my instincts which are generally pretty intuitive.
Thanks for sharing this.